Hohenheim struggled to get a good hold on the hapless General who was so out of it he had trouble understanding the presence of a third person.

"But!" He got out as Ed moved away, reaching after him. "Where are you going? I want to come with you! You said I could grope you."

"You are going with my dad," Ed ordered. "You need a doctor. I'm coming as soon as I can."

This part made me laugh, and then I read it to my roommate, who now thinks I'm nuts and didn't see the humor. But seriously, that has to be awkward.

Good job!